Are you still smoking ? one of the most serious problems facing the world is smoking . We can see a lot of people smoking cigarettes in different ages. Most people already know that smoking is bad but they don’t know the dangerous of it . there in fact that in northern Ireland around 2,500 deaths each year . In this essay will discuss the problem of smoking and some solution for it .
Good structure, but a few language problems.
ReplyDelete1) No space between the last word in a sentence and a question mark
2) Always capitalize the first word in a sentence
3) 'dangerous' is an adjective, and is the wrong form here. what do you need?
4) What does Northern Ireland have to do with your essay?
5) "In this essay will discuss..." Remove 'in'
6) What will you discuss about the problem? How many solutions? Don't say 'some' in your thesis statement.